18: Michael
Author: (1) Organized the concepts of the infinite loop and the confusing chronology of the crystal sphere sequences.
(2) Added more detailed descriptions to the duel between Michael and Lucifer.
(3) Removed the idea that angels became conservative because of the Demon Realm’s openness, since in the new version, angels are already written as naturally conservative from the start.
(4) In the original, Michael was quite rebellious and often criticized Heaven. This has been revised: now he leans more toward loyalty to Heaven, which better sets up the ideological conflict in Volume III (Eternity).
(5) Adjusted the timeline of Michael’s challenge letter to Lucifer. It now occurs a thousand years after Lucifer’s Fall, when Mammon is already fully grown. This fixes the previous version’s inconsistency where Michael issued the challenge “because Mammon was born”.
(6) Added more cultural worldbuilding about the Demon Realm.
(7) Since Lucifer’s image already appears on newspapers and currency, it makes no sense for Heaven to be unaware of his appearance, so the earlier rumors where his new appearance was grotesquely exaggerated have been deleted.
(8) Clarified the reason why Michael stabbed Lucifer. The original version didn’t explain his motive clearly enough.
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Lucifer & Michael by Heiseijinyao.
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Throwing confetti! We’re on to Original Sin!
I’m quite satisfied with how this volume turned out, so revisions will mainly be structural—adding a few descriptive layers and tightening the pacing. The prose itself won’t change much. 🙂
It’s said this is the most popular volume of The Right Wing of God, and I’m still not sure whether that’s because of the emotional torment or simply because Mammon is in it…
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19: The Road That Beguiles (1)
(1) Trimmed some excessive exposition and moved the important parts to later chapters, blending them naturally into the plot.
(2) Changed Michael’s action of pinching someone’s cheek to tapping their back, more outwardly masculine.
(3) Since Michael, as Heaven’s leader, must maintain authority and dignity, he wouldn’t casually admit to “admiring” anyone, so that line was revised. (TN: In the older version, there was a line where Michael admits to Mammon that he admires Mammon’s father, Lucifer.)
(4) Added new dialogue among Raphael, Michael, and Metatron discussing the relations between Heaven and the Demon Realm.
(5) Expanded the biology exam blurb to include the chosen answer applicable to Mammon.
(6) Because Mammon had already seen Michael’s photo earlier, he should recognize him at first sight.
(7) The “black pearl” detail that abruptly disappeared from earlier drafts has been restored here.
(8) Added a new bit of characterization that Mammon is still a student, and not a very studious one. (TN: Belial being the only studious one in the fam, lol.)
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Mammon by squishy Heiseijinyao
Michael by Rememholy
Mammon has finally appeared—more confetti!
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19: The Road That Beguiles (2)
(9) Men generally don’t pay much attention to other men’s looks, especially fathers toward sons, who judge by strength rather than appearance. Since the earlier version of Michael was too sentimental, I revised his tone to be more composed and befitting an Archangel. The original line—
“Your mother must have been in a very good mood when she carried you. They say the happier a mother is during pregnancy, the more beautiful the child.”
has been rewritten to sound more formal and restrained.
(10) Because the topic of Lucifer is still taboo, Michael now approaches questions about him more indirectly and cautiously.
(11) Added additional dialogue between Mammon and Michael.
(12) Since Mammon isn’t capable of using magic, the previous incantation scene was changed to him using magical fluid instead. Also added a new flashback where child Mammon, unable to return to the Demon Realm, was reported by angels to Heaven’s authorities.
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20: Of Real and Fake Lilith (1)
(1) Removed some of Mammon’s overly affectionate gestures toward Michael. For any male lead who “has potential”, I usually prefer to keep a bit of emotional distance between him and the protagonist—ahem, minor spoiler there…
(2) Since Michael is the Archangel, he shouldn’t be ignorant of the Demon Realm’s currency. The scene where he asks Mammon about monetary units has been revised so that he already knows.
(3) Although demons are generally more open about sex, they don’t easily speak of love. So Mammon’s line “You’ve really fallen in love with me” was changed to “You really like me.”
(4) Added new details describing the distinctive aura of demons.
(5) Expanded the worldbuilding around the Demon Realm’s biological research and scientific surveys.
(6) The scene where Mammon helps Michael onto a boat has been deleted. After all, two guys wouldn’t need to hold hands just to board, especially when one of them is a six-winged Archangel who can fly. That kind of “helping him aboard” moment might work in a hetero romance, but not here. ==
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20: Of Real and Fake Lilith (2)
(7) Reduced the imagery of the inverted cross. In this story, Lucifer’s rebellion isn’t about just doing the opposite of whatever God does, it’s more about pursuing his own ideal, so I toned that symbolism down.
(8) Reinforced the Baroque architectural style that was added in the revised Divine Punishment, aligning the descriptions in this chapter for visual and thematic consistency.
(9) The original line—
“My dearest people, I will lead you to a land more beautiful than the Demon Realm or the Human World… our utopia.” (TN: Michael’s line as the new Vice Regent)
was so overdramatic it made me cringe in the wind. I rewrote it into something subtler and more dignified.
(10) Added clarification distinguishing the political and leadership structures of Heaven and the Demon Realm.
(11) Made Lucifer a bit more dominant again; he should exude the natural authority and allure of a top!
(12) Expanded the details of Lucifer and Michael’s KISS.
(13) Added more of Michael’s internal reflections.
Chibi Michael:
After opening a new story pit, I was immediately ambushed by my readers’ fierce demands for updates, so I’ve decided to be extra diligent with The Right Wing of God to make it up to everyone. As such, today’s blessing is: Leave a comment while reading and there’ll be an update tomorrow! ><
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21: Envoy to the Demon Realm (1)
(1) Since the Demon Realm’s slave ships are remnants of an old historical system, Michael should already be aware of them. Mammon just needs to provide a more detailed explanation here, so I adjusted the dialogue accordingly.
(2) Refined the classical landscape descriptions.
(3) Added a new line where Mammon openly challenges Michael to a duel.
(4) Moved Mammon and Michael’s first kiss to a different point in the story where it fits better emotionally. (Translator: Ahem, it was moved to after the Feast of Eros chapters)
(5) Gave Michael more of a “top” vibe! (Translator: Go Archangel, go!)
(6) Deleted Michael’s self-motivational slogan—
“Surpass your limits. Surpass yourself. Win victory, create miracles.”
— It sounded too much like an Olympic motto…Let me delete this much memed line…
(7) Since Sariel would’ve already seen Michael in the newspaper, and witnessed his duel with Lucifer, it made no sense for him not to recognize Michael at first glance. Adjusted.
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21: Envoy to the Demon Realm (2)
(8) Removed Samael’s snake-tongue detail, can’t have Lilith’s husband be that cringe.
(9) Revised Michael’s line about facing criticism. The original—
“At first, I felt indignant and wanted to defend myself. But as time went on, I grew numb to it.”
— sounded too resentful. Now it reads more magnanimously:
“Indeed, as the Archangel’s leader, standing firm on the battlefield is my duty. But when facing criticism from others, keeping a broad mind matters most of all.”
(10) Added a new setting detail: when demons become emotionally agitated, their eyes turn red. This trait will appear frequently later on. ><
(11) Made Mammon a little more top! too. Don’t tell me he was already top enough— I don’t think it was enough. Originally, he asked the Archdevils, “Who’s the most beautiful guy here?” but I changed it to “Who’s the strongest?” Youthful recklessness over self-absorbed vanity, he’s not some narcissistic bottom…
(12) Expanded on Demon youth culture.
(13) Removed some of Mammon’s overly blunt dialogue. He should still show a bit of caution toward Michael. And because, as I mentioned before—he has potential (TN: to be with the MC)…
(14) Made Lucifer more top! again. Honestly, the earlier version of him was far too soft. Looking back, I realize I just didn’t know how to write men properly at that age. OTZ
(15) Added more of Michael’s memories.
(16) Lucifer has already seen mature!Michael before, so there’s no way he wouldn’t recognize him immediately.
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Side note: Mammon’s habit of biting people instead of kissing them is a new addition. It’s a deliberate setup. The reason behind it will be revealed later…
Author: A fan of TLZY & JZYZ
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